It feels odd that a dialogue have both parts be spoken by one person in addition to the third-person narration. Does that no run against the rules of writing? [He knows that in reports, tenses have to match lest the flow of the narrative weaken. Fiction requires that the audience remain engaged with the subject rather than distance themselves from the text, and disrupting the grammatical backbone was a severe misstep for both nonfiction and fiction, albeit for different reasons.]

For example, who is the narrator in this story? Are they omniscient? Is it the drunkard character?